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제목 | Self Introduction | 등록일 | 2014-02-04 |
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내용 | Where I stop says who I am [1] Hello. everyone. My name is Park Taejin, and my English name is Nemo. [2] I am 42 years old. These are photos of my childhood. You can’t believe that this young boy was me. I can’t believe it, either. [3] I have a wife and a son. I’ve been a good husband to my wife for 10 years. My wife is a Chinese teacher in the elementary school. My son is 9-year old boy. Unlike me, he is very clever and handsome. [4] These are my large families. [5] My major in the university was philosophy. I have the master degree of western philosophy. I had studied especially the Greek philosophy, and Logic. Through studying philosophy, I could learn to think logically and think analytically of the world. I enjoy digging into the details of the case relating to reading books, watching movie, understanding society. [6] Also, when I was a student in the university, I indulged in watching night sky and studying astronomy. As one member in astronomy club, I used to go to a dark and wide field at night and watch the deep sky objects like planets, moon, galaxies, nebulas with telescope or binocular. At that time, I could see the tiny parts of vast universe. Sometimes I felt the dizzy in the immense space. [7] After graduate school, I took a part in developing the CD-ROM Titles. Those were educational game software which were increasing logical thinking ability for kids. The title of game was ‘The pendulum of Hades’. [8] I was very proud to see students playing the game that I helped create. [9] Anyway, through that experience, I was naturally stepped to the education industry area. Now, I am a project manager who’s in charge of the development of e-learning contents for Hanyang Cyber University. [10] My current hobby is playing baseball. Every weekend, I and my son go to the baseball field to participate in the amateur baseball league game or training. I am still a substitute player, so I don’t have my own position until now. But I hope to be a key player as a pitcher someday. My wife likes us playing baseball, because I and my son can have the happy time to be together and she can have a free time from the responsibility of taking care of a child. I do my best to be a good father and a good husband for my family. [11] And I love hiking. The mountain I like the most is Seorak Mountain and Halla Mountain. I hope that I can go Himalaya trekking course someday. Also, I like to ride bike. From time to time, I commute by my bike from Bundang where I live to Hanyang University where I work along the riverside of Tancheon and Hangang. [12] I like to experience new thing, and seek out challenges in many fields. Becoming a member of Toastmasters club is a big challenge for me. It seems to me that it is more difficult than climbing Himalaya Mountain. I hope you will help me. Thank you for listening. |
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담당강사 | Elsie1 | 등록일 | 2014-04-21 |
첨삭 내용 | >Where I stop says who I am [1] Hello. everyone. My name is Park Taejin, and my English name is Nemo. [2] I am 42 years old. These are photos of my childhood. You can’t believe that this young boy was me. I can’t believe it, either. [3] I have a wife and a son. I’ve been a good husband to my wife for 10 years. My wife is a Chinese teacher in elementary school. My son is a 9-year old boy. Unlike me, he is very clever and handsome. [4] These are my large families. [5] My major in university was philosophy. I also had master degree of western philosophy. I studied Greek philosophy, and Logic. Through studying philosophy, I learned to think logically and think analytically of the world. I enjoy digging into the details of the case relating to reading books, watching movie, understanding society. [6] Also, when I was a student in the university, I indulged in watching night sky and studying astronomy. As one member in astronomy club, I used to go to a dark and wide field at night and watch the deep sky objects like planets, moon, galaxies, nebulas with telescope or binocular. At that time, I could see the tiny parts of vast universe. Sometimes I felt dizzy in the immense space. [7] After graduate school, I took a part in developing the CD-ROM Titles. Those were educational game software which were increasing logical thinking ability for kids. The title of game was ‘The pendulum of Hades’. [8] I was very proud to see students playing the game that I helped create. [9] Anyway, through that experience, I was naturally stepped to the education industry area. Now, I am a project manager who’s in charge of the development of e-learning contents for Hanyang Cyber University. [10] My current hobby is playing baseball. Every weekend, I and my son go to the baseball field to participate in the amateur baseball league game or training. I am still a substitute player, so I don’t have my own position until now. But I hope to be a key player as a pitcher someday. My wife likes us playing baseball, because I and my son can have the happy time to be together and she can have a free time from the responsibility of taking care of our child. I do my best to be a good father and a good husband for my family. [11] And I love hiking. The mountain I like the most is Seorak Mountain and Halla Mountain. I hope that I can go Himalaya trekking course someday. Also, I like to ride a bike. From time to time, I commute by my bike from Bundang where I live to Hanyang University where I work along the riverside of Tancheon and Hangang. [12] I like to experience new things, and seek out challenges in many fields. Becoming a member of Toastmasters club is a big challenge for me. It seems to me that it is more difficult than climbing Himalaya Mountain. I hope you will help me. Thank you for listening. Taejin, I am so happy to know you better. Your introduction was very good. You made good sentences and that's impressive. Congratulations! Job well done! T. Elsie |