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제목 Jogging 등록일 2014-08-04
내용 As far as I remember, It may a couple of years ago.
I started have a jogging. Because my doctor recommended it to reduce the depression symtomps.
It was very helpful to relieve my stress and refresh my mind.

I used to have a jogging twice a week.
When I first joged, 30min of jogging was very difficult,
but after serveral times of trying I adopt about it and continued to it for about 1hour.
But Thesedays I don't do that. Becuase I feel exhausted after jogging or knee-pain.
So I changed my mind to ride a bicycle.
It is very helpful to reduce my back-pain.
and I'd like to ride a bicycle at the bike-track in the park which is located in near my house.

It's my story about jogging and why I changed my mind.
That's all~
담당강사 Kat 등록일 2014-08-04
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As far as I remember, It may a couple of years ago. - As far as I remember, It may I started jogging a couple of years ago.

I started have a jogging. - I started have a jogging.

Because my doctor recommended it to reduce the depression symtomps. - Because my doctor recommended it to reduce the depression symptoms symtomps.

It was very helpful to relieve my stress and refresh my mind. - Good Sentence yes

I used to have a jogging twice a week. - I used to go have a jogging twice a week.

When I first joged, 30min of jogging was very difficult, - When I first jogged, 30mins of jogging was very difficult,

but after serveral times of trying I adopt about it and continued to it for about 1hour. - but after serveral times of trying I adopted about it and continued to it for about 1hour.

But Thesedays I don't do that. Becuase I feel exhausted after jogging or knee-pain. - But Tthesedays, I don't do that. Becuase I feel exhausted after jogging or knee-pain. 

So I changed my mind to ride a bicycle. - So, I changed my mind to about jogging and decided to ride a bicycle.

It is very helpful to reduce my back-pain. - Good Sentence yes

I'd like to ride a bicycle at the bike-track in the park which is located in near my house. - Good Sentence yes

It's my story about jogging and why I changed my mind. That's all~ - It's This is my story about jogging and why I changed my mind. That's all~

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