"In my family, most of the household chores have been done by my mother. Because my family consists of 3 men and 1 woman. Traditionally, in Korea, women do the housework. These days it has changed fairly. But outdated old custom still remain. My father has very flexible thought except regarding housework. My faterh has not done chores at all. But kind two sons including me always help mother clean rooms by using vacuume machine, wash dished and take out the trash. When I was a student, I had tried to help my mother at least one thing every day. But now I am busy due to work, I almost rely on my mother about housework. I'm afraid if I live alone without my mother's supporting."

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In my family, most of the household chores have been done by my mother. Because my family consists of 3 men and 1 woman. Traditionally, in Korea, women do the housework. These days it has changed fairly. But outdated old custom still remain. My father has very flexible thought except regarding housework. My faterh has not done chores at all. But kind two sons including me always help mother clean rooms by using vacuume machine, wash dished and take out the trash. When I was a student, I had tried to help my mother at least one thing every day. But now I am busy due to work, I almost rely on my mother about housework. I'm afraid if I live alone without my mother's supporting.

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Most of the household chores are done by my mother because she is the only woman in the family.Traditionally, in Korea, women do the houseworks. These days it has changed fairly, but outdated old custom still remain.My father has a very flexible thought except houseworks.My father has not done any chores at all. My brother and I are both kind. We always help our mother clean our rooms with a vacuum cleaner, wash dishes and take out the trash. When I was a student, I tried to help my mother with at least one housework every day. But now, I am busy due to work. I almost rely on my mother about houseworks. I'm afraid to live alone without my mother's support.

Note:
Red - spelling, punctuation and capitalization
Blue - additionals and better expressions
Violet - sentence structure
Green - prepositions and articles
Yellow - word usage
Pink - verb tenses

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Hi Mr. Won,

I can see how interested you are in learning the language. I am really glad how you work hard to improve. Your composition for today impressed me. Just be careful not to slip any articles or prepositions. Remember to be mindful with the tenses of your verb too. Continue practicing your skills. Have a wonderful day!

Love,
Teacher Angel