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| 제목 | I write about Concert | 등록일 | 2014-08-18 |
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| 내용 | I like going to the korean pop concert with my friends. I have a favorite place to enjoy concert. It is seoul art center Because it is located right beside the subway station. So it is convenient to go there. I also have a favorite seat to enjoy concert. I like to watch the concert in the very front. I like standing on the open floor in the front since that's where all the action is. We can sing loudly along with the singer and jump up to the music. It is very exciting there with my friends and it feels like I become one with a group. After that, I relieve stress. and I usually buy tickets on the website of seoul art center early because first row tickets sell out quickly. These tickets are usually very expensive so I can't go often, but I will go to the concert soon with my friends to jump around and stress out. |
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| 담당강사 | Monica | 등록일 | 2014-08-19 |
| 첨삭 내용 | [ CORRECTION] I like going to the korean pop concert with my friends. -> I like going to a Korean pop concert with my friends. -Good! I have a favorite place to enjoy concert. It is seoul art center Because it is located right beside the subway station. -> I have a favorite place to enjoy watching a concert. It is the Seoul Art Center. I like going there because it is located right beside the subway station. So it is convenient to go there. -Good! I also have a favorite seat to enjoy concert. -> I also have a favorite seat to watch the concert. I like to watch the concert in the very front. -Good! I like standing on the open floor in the front since that's where all the action is. -> I like standing on the open floor at the front since that's where all the action is. We can sing loudly along with the singer and jump up to the music.-Good! It is very exciting there with my friends and it feels like I become one with a group. -> It is very exciting there with my friends and it feels like I become one with the group. After that, I relieve stress. and I usually buy tickets on the website of seoul art center early because first row tickets sell out quickly. -> After These tickets are usually very expensive so I can't go often, but I will go to the concert soon with my friends to jump around and stress out. ->These tickets are usually very expensive so I can't go often, but I will go to the concert soon with my friends to jump around and to stress out.
[ COMMENT] Hi Moon! Thank you for sharing this with me. Watching concert is definitely fun and exciting especially if you're with your friends. I am glad to know that you like music, especially the Kpop genre. It is nice to know someone like you who enjoys watching and dancing with the music. Anyway, I also like Kpop. ^^ I hope that you will be able to watch a Kpop concert soon and have fun! Tell me some stories then! ^^
-T. Monica |
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