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제목 | Contract your friend and describe how it broke and its current condition | 등록일 | 2014-08-25 |
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내용 | Hello, Chris! It's me. How are you feeling today? As a matter of fact, I've got something to tell you about the MP3 player that I borrowed from you. Well, unfortunately it seems like I broke it. I accidently dropped it on the bus. I am so sorry but it was not my intention. But don't worry. There are a few alternatives I came up with. First, I'll go to the repair shop and ask them if they can fix it. Fortunately, In case they can fix it, then would you wait for several days until they repair your MP3 player? If you need to listen to music, I will lend you my old PMP until that time. You can listen to music. I hope it will be fixed but if not, I can buy you the same new one or compensate for money. Anyway, Once again I'm very sorry. Are you free tonight? Let's have dinner together and talk more about it. I'll treat you. See you. |
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담당강사 | Love | 등록일 | 2014-08-26 |
첨삭 내용 | Hello, Chris! It's me. How are you feeling today? As a matter of fact, I've got something to tell you about the MP3 player that I borrowed from you. Well, unfortunately it seems like I broke it. I accidently dropped it on the bus. I am so sorry but it was not my intention. But don't worry. There are a few alternatives I came up with. First, I'll go to the repair shop and ask them if they can fix it. Fortunately, In case they can fix it, then would you wait for several days until they repair your MP3 player? If you need to listen to music, I will lend you my old PMP until that time. You can listen to music. I hope it will be fixed but if not, I can buy you the same new one or compensate for money. Anyway, Once again I'm very sorry. Are you free tonight? Let's have dinner together and talk more about it. I'll treat you. See you. ========================================================================= -> -> Fortunately, in case they can fix it, ... -> I can buy you the same new one or compensate with money. -> Anyway, once again I'm very sorry. ================================ Hi Jason, Good job on your writing today. Most of your corrections were only on capitalization. Please remember that you only capitalize the first letter of a word in the beginning of a sentence or if it's a proper noun. If not, then there's no need to capitalize it after a comma. Furthermore, avoid starting your sentence with conjunctions (and, but, so, or, etc...). See you in class! |