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제목 daily working 등록일 2014-09-01
내용 I am an office worker and my working hour is from 9 to 6.
So I usually wake up 6 am at home and I prepare to go out at 8 am.
I arrive at my company at 8:50
Right after arriving at work, My first work is to set a my desk something like open my drawer, turn on my laptop computer and so on.
Before starting my job, I wash my mug cup and I make a cup of coffee.
While drinking my coffee, I check the email. And my work start! Beat the work!
My major job is to check & analysis system like pc, server which is infected from malware like virus.
and I find vulnerability against samsung IT system.
Then I finish my work around 7 p.m, Sometime I work until 11 pm
When I go home, I'm exhausted. But I have other job for my family.
So Daily life is always busy. so When I have free time, I have to sleep alot
담당강사 Mae 등록일 2014-09-01
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I am an office worker and my working hour is from 9 to 6. So I usually wake up 6 am at home and I prepare to go out at 8 am.

-> I am an office worker and my working hour is from 9am to 6am. I usually wake up at 6 am and Ieave the house at 8 am.

I arrive at my company at 8:50 Right after arriving at work, my first work is to set a my desk something like open my drawer, turn on my laptop computer and so on.

-> I arrive at my company at 8:50. The things that i do first are setting up mydesk / table, opening my drawer, turning on my laptop computer and so on.

Before starting my job, I wash my mug cup and I make a cup of coffee. While drinking my coffee, I check the email. And my work start! Beat the work!

->Before starting my job, I wash my mug and I make a cup of coffee. While drinking coffee, I check the email and start working! Beat the work!

My major job is to scheck & analysis system like pc, erver which is infected from malware like virus.

->I am in charge of checking & analyzing system for pc and server which are infected by malware like virus.

and I find vulnerability against samsung IT system.

-> I find samsung IT system vulnerable.

Then I finish my work around 7 p.m, Sometime I work until 11 pm When I go home, I'm exhausted.

->I finish my work around 7 p.m, Sometimes I work until 11 pm. When I go home I'm exhausted

But I have other job for my family. So Daily life is always busy. so When I have free time, I have to sleep alotu

->. I have responsibilities to do for my family. So everyday i'm always busy. When I have free time, I have to sleep alot.

 

Hi there,

Thank you so much for sharing about your work. Your job is really hard. Let's talk more about your work in class. Have a nice day!

Teacher Mae

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