My office is far from my home.

⇒ Correct Sentence! 

I usually take the subway due to the traffic congestion and it takes about one hour and a half.

⇒ Correct Sentence! 

I'm listening to music and reading a book during my commute time.

⇒ Correct Sentence! 

Sometime I find it amazing how quickly time passes.

⇒ Correct Sentence! 

There are a lot of buildings and it is always crowed with people for work.

⇒There are a lot of buildings and it is always crowded with people. for work. 

Because it’s on 19th floor. So, I can see the great view at night.

⇒Because my office is on the 19th floor. So, I can see the great view at night. 

Another of advantages is located close to many facilities.

⇒Another of advantages is it is located close to many facilities. 

I can go to the shopping, watch a movie and eat something after work.

⇒I can go to the shopping mall, watch a movie and eat something after work. 

It is very convenient within walking distance of there.

⇒It is very convenient, it is within walking distance. of there.

Hi Song, Thank you for this composition. I am happy that even though you were busy preparing for your OPIc test, you still managed to write something here. See you later in class.

-Meril