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제목 17~20 등록일 2014-09-30
내용 #17
Let me check my communicator again.
Let's divide into 2 groups.

1 People that I've known them in advance to joining company and after.

2 SDS , and the other companies.

3 CMS team members, and the others.
Oh more another team members?


#18
But for 140 SDS people, the most are CMS people.

Cause there are not many chances to meet other team members.


#19
So,
keyword is needed to connect all the employees of SDS.

just like a hashtag of Facebook, twitter and instagram.


#20
Let's put some keyword to find employee.

like this!

In my case i need a help with silverlight and i can give a help with optic and presentation.

Me, ms.presentation can find out Mr. Silverlight, and Connected!!
담당강사 Ritchell 등록일 2014-10-01
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[CORRECTIONS]

#17 Let me check my communicator again. Let's divide into 2 groups.

-> #17 Let me check my communicator again. Let's divide into 2 groups. (no lapses)

 People that I've known them in advance to joining company and after. 2 SDS , and the other companies. 3 CMS team members,

-> People that I've known for a long time, 2 SDS  and the other companies, 3 CMS team members and the others.

Oh more another team members? #18 But for 140 SDS people, the most are CMS people.

-> Oh more another team members? #18 But for 140 SDS people, the most are CMS members.

Cause there are not many chances to meet other team members.

-> Cause there are no many chances to meet other team members.

#19 So, keyword is needed to connect all the employees of SDS. just like a hashtag of Facebook, twitter and instagram.

-> #19 So, keyword is needed to connect all the employees of SDS. just like a hashtag on Facebook, twitter and instagram.

#20 Let's put some keyword to find employee. like this! In my case i need a help with silverlight and i can give a help with optic and presentation.

-> #20 Let's put some keywords to find employee. Like this, in my case I need help with silverlight and I can give a hand with optic and presentation.

Me, ms.presentation can find out Mr. Silverlight, and Conncted!!

-> Me, ms.presentation can find out Mr. Silverlight and we can be connected!

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