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제목 Self-introduction 등록일 2014-03-03
내용 My name is Jay. I'm 30's mid. My family is my wife and a adorable dauther.
I got married 4 years ago. I live in Bu-Cheon Kyung-Ki-Do which is west of Seoul.
I moved 2 years ago. My parents and parents-in-law live near by my home. So we often visit to parents and parents-in-law's house and we have a good time. But my company is far from my house. So everyday I travle to company which is at Suwon. It takes about 3 hours to get there and back. I work at MES Operation group department in Samsung SDS. I am system programer. MES is manufacturing execution system. MES is very important in manufacturing field. Nowdays If there is not MES, any production cannot be made in factory. So I have pride of my job. MES is running for 24 hours. Therefore our department always be too busy. On weekday when I come back home,the time is about 10 PM. I don't have time to spend with my familly. So. on weekend I effort to spend time with my familly.
담당강사 Elizabeth2 등록일 2014-03-05
첨삭 내용

My name is Jay. I'm in my mid 30's. My family is made up of myself, my wife and my adorable daugther. I got married 4 years ago. I live in Bu-Cheon Kyung-Ki-Do, which is west of Seoul. I moved here 2 years ago. Both my parents and parents-in-law live near my home so we often visit them and we have a good time together. But, my company is far from my house. So every day I have to travel a long way to my company, which is (located) in Suwon. It takes about 3 hours to get there and back. I work in the MES Operation group department at Samsung SDS. I am a system programer. MES is a manufacturing execution system. MES is very important in the manufacturing field. These days If we didn't have MES, production could not take place in the factory. So I take pride in my job. MES operates 24 hours a day. Therefore our department is always very busy. On the weekdays when I get home it's about 10 PM. I don't have any time to spend with my familly so on the weekends I make an effort to spend as much time as possible with them.

 

Thanks for this Jay!

I only had to make minor corrections and add in a few things. Great job!

Let me know if you have any questions.

-Teacher Elizabeth

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