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제목 Neighbor 등록일 2014-12-09
내용 I want to tell you about my neighbor who are living downstairs of my old apartment. Last year, I was living in a very old apartment which was on the process of remodeling. One summer day, after a heavy rain, someone knocked my door and it was my neighbor. He asked me to go and check his home with him. When I opened the door, there were lots of buckets in his living room to store drained water from the ceiling. The apartment was so old that there were lots of leakages on the walls. If I were him, I would have been very angry about it. But he was very nice and calm so he just asked me to fix it. Fortunetly, it didn’t cost me a lot so I was very relieved. After this, I decided to buy new apartment and I am living there now.
담당강사 Wynston2 등록일 2014-12-09
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I want to tell you about my neighbor who are IS CURRENTLY living downstairs of IN my old apartment,  Last year, I was living in a very old apartment which was on IN the process of remodeling. One summer day LAST YEAR after a heavy rain, someone knocked ON my door, and it HAPPENED TO BE was my neighbor. He asked me to go and check his home with him. When I opened the door, there were lots of buckets in his living room to store drained DRIPPING water from the ceiling. The apartment was so old that there were lots of leakages on the walls. If I were him, I would have been very angry about it, but he was very nice and calm so he just asked me to fix it. Fortunetly, FORTUNATELY, it didn’t cost me a lot so I was very relieved. After this, I decided to buy A new apartment and THAT IS WHERE I PRESENTLY RESIDE. I am living there now.

 

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