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제목 Escape from IKEA 등록일 2014-12-22
내용 I went to IKEA store located in Gwang-Myoung city which is thirty minutes drive distance from my house on weekend.
IKEA opened their first store in Korea last thursday, and It was issued all around country.
When we managed to arrive at the store, there were a big wave of thounsands of people in line to enter into the store, furthermore it starts snow.
My girlfriend and I was standing in line outside of the store for an hour. Finally we entered the store, and bumped here and there with shoulder to shoulder. I felt a little fatigue, and wanted to get out of this place, but the store was too huge to find the exit. We managed to escape from the holocaust and went to the food court and found out the food was so cheap. But there was a long line to another holocaust. We stopped our 'Mission to IKEA', and we went to a really delicious sashimi restaurant.
담당강사 Jasmine1 등록일 2014-12-23
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I went to the IKEA store located in Gwang-Myoung city which is a thirty-minute drive distance from my house on the weekend. IKEA opened their first store in Korea last Thursday, and it was publicized all around the country. issued all around country. When we managed to arrive at the store, there was were a big wave of thounsands of people in line to enter into the store, furthermore it started snowing starts snow. My girlfriend and I were was standing in line outside of the store for an hour. Finally we entered the store, and bumped here and there, with shoulder to shoulder. I felt a little fatigued, and wanted to get out of the this place, but the store was too huge to find the exit. We managed to escape from the holocaust and went to the food court and found out the food was so cheap. But there was a long line to another holocaust. We stopped our 'Mission to IKEA', and we went to a really delicious sashimi restaurant.

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I love the title of this writing by the way.

--"It was issued all around the country" --> I'm just guessing you meant it was advertized or publicized?

I only ate at an Ikea once, but I really enjoyed the 70 cent coffee. I think I had 2 or 3 cups because it was so cheap! It's a good deal. School menus should be more like Ikea menus.

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