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제목 | Hi! This is Choi. | 등록일 | 2015-01-15 |
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내용 | Hello This Choi. Thanks for your consideration in our last night class. I told you that I went to mortuary with my wife to worship for the dead. Actually, one of my Church member's mother passed away at three days before today. She had a big disease and struggled against very long time. We arrived the room, and observed a little while silence in memory of the deceased. After that, We made a deep bow face to face the son who's mother died. And also, We gave the words comfort to his family. When every Church members arrived, we worshiped for the dead. My wife and I got very sorrowful but got meaningful time. Teacher! We are all mortal. I thought deeply about 'How do I live?' and 'What is the purpose of my life?' When I will have to face with death someday... What kinds of memory do I have to show God? Thank you for reading. Bye Teacher. |
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담당강사 | Wynston2 | 등록일 | 2015-01-16 |
첨삭 내용 | Hello This Choi. Thanks for your consideration in our last night class. I told you that I went to mortuary with my wife to worship for the dead. Actually, one of my Church member's mother passed away at three days before today. She had a big disease and struggled against very long time. We arrived the room, and observed a little while silence in memory of the deceased. After that, We made a deep bow face to face the son who's mother died. And also, We gave the words comfort to his family. When every Church members arrived, we worshiped for the dead. My wife and I got very sorrowful but got meaningful time. Teacher! We are all mortal. I thought deeply about 'How do I live?' and 'What is the purpose of my life?' When I will have to face with death someday... What kinds of memory do I have to show God? Thank you for reading. Bye Teacher. HELLO, THIS IS CHOI, THANKS FOR YOUR CONSIDERATION DURING LAST NIGHT'S CLASS. ON ACCOUNT OF THE DEATH OF ONE OUR CHURCH MEMBERS SEVERAL DAYS AGO, I HAD TOLD YOU THAT MY WIFE AND I ATTENDED A WORSJIP CEREMONY AT THE MORTUARY. THE LADY WHO DIED, HAD BEEN STRUGGLING WITH A TERRIBLE AILMENT FOR QUITE SOME TIME. DURING THE CEREMONY, WE ACCORDED RESPECT FOR THE DECEASED, AND IN KOREAN TRADITION, MADE A DEEP BOW TOWARD THE SON WHOSE MOTHER DIED, ALONG WITH GIVING COMFORT TO THE REST OF THE FAMILY. ONCE ALL OF THE CHURCH MEMBERS ARRIVED, THE CEREMONY OFFICIALLY COMMENCED. AS A DIRECT RESULT FROM THIS EXPERIENCE, I CONSIDERED MY HUMAN FRAILTY, AND HAVE BEEN FORCED TO ASK MYSELF, "WHAT IS THE PURPOSE OF MY LIFE". I KNOW THAT I MUST FACE DEATH ONE DAY, BUT THE QUESTION IS, "HOW WILL I BE ACCOUNTABLE TO GOD WHEN THAT TIME ARRIVES?"
*** CHOI, I FEEL WHAT YOU ARE FEELING, AND FOR THIS REASON, WAS ABLE TO EXPRESS THE ABOVE PARAGRAPH WITH SIMILAR FEELING AND EMOTION. BE BLESSED! TEACHER WYSNTON |