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제목 Hello. Monica 등록일 2015-01-21
내용 I wanted to talk with you more last class. Because the title we had is very controversial object.
These days, A lot of people spend a lot of time in posting on their SNS and browsing others.
It has many advantanges. From those SNSs, we can know that what our friends are interested with and new infromaition. But when we see other's SNS, we can feel ofloss with what we don't have.
Overall we have to be smarter than smart equipments such as smartphone.
담당강사 Monica 등록일 2015-01-21
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I wanted to talk with you more last class. -OK!

Because the title we had is very controversial object.

-> Because the title topic we had is was a very controversial object.

These days, A lot of people spend a lot of time in posting on their SNS and browsing others.

-> These days, a lot of people spend a lot of time in posting on their SNS accounts and browsing on different sites others.

It has many advantanges.-ok!

From those SNSs, we can know that what our friends are interested with and new infromaition.

-> From those SNSs, We can know that what our friends are interested in with and see new infromaition from people around us.

But when we see other's SNS, we can feel ofloss with what we don't have.

Overall we have to be smarter than smart equipments such as smartphone.

-> Overall we have to be smarter than smart  these equipments such as smartphone.

[c o m m e n t ]

thanks for sharing this idea.  You are actually correct. Using SNS is quite fun and exciting. As you gain new experiences and ideas, you must know your limits and be aware of your surroundings. Don't get affected and try to use technology for your benefit.

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