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제목 today 등록일 2015-05-07
내용 Because it has a wide grass and located to the river. I can do many thing such as lying on the grass, riding a bicycle, riding a cruise.
people usually eat a chiken at Hangang park. I like to ride a tandem bicycle. Because I can't ride a bicycle. River breeze on the bicycle makes me feel good.
Last summer, we went to the park, we riding a crusise. And we watched a fireworks display on the cruise. It was very fantastic.
But every time we went there, not only it cost a lot of money but also it takes time to go to restaurants. What I like most about spaghetti is Vongole Spaghetti. I used to find the recipe on the internet.
I hate to open my photo to the public. Because I'm worried about an invasion of privacy.
SNS is a little botherd. I have been try to it, but I gave up soon. Because it takes long time to write a blog. I'm very busy these days due to job seeking. I have no time to the SNS. Insted , I use kakao talks to communicate with my friends.
담당강사 Edna1 등록일 2015-05-08
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Because it has a wide grass and located to the river. I can do many thing such as lying on the grass, riding a bicycle, riding a cruise. people usually eat a chiken at Hangang park. I like to ride a tandem bicycle. Because I can't ride a bicycle. River breeze on the bicycle makes me feel good. Last summer, we went to the park, we riding a crusise. And we watched a fireworks display on the cruise. It was very fantastic. But every time we went there, not only it cost a lot of money but also it takes time to go to restaurants. What I like most about spaghetti is Vongole Spaghetti. I used to find the recipe on the internet. I hate to open my photo to the public. Because I'm worried about an invasion of privacy. SNS is a little botherd. I have been try to it, but I gave up soon. Because it takes long time to write a blog. I'm very busy these days due to job seeking. I have no time to the SNS. Insted , I use kakao talks to communicate with my friends.

 

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 Hangang park has a wide grass and located near the river. I can do many things such as lying on the grass, riding a bicycle, riding a cruise there. Some people eat chicken there too. I like to ride in a tandem bicycle because I can't ride on my own. River breeze while bicycling makes me feel good. Last summer, we went to the park and rode on a cruise. We watched fireworks display too. It was very fantastic. But every time we went there, not only it cost a lot of money but also it takes time to go to restaurants. What I like most about spaghetti is Vongole Spaghetti. I used to find the recipe on the internet. I hate to open my photo to the public because I'm worried about an invasion of privacy. SNS is a little bothering for me. I tried to use it but I gave up easily. The reason why is because it akes time to write a blog.  I'm very busy these days due to job seeking. i have no time to use SNS. Instead, I use kakao talk to communicate with my friends.

Hi Irene ,

Thanks for writing. Any way , I already found out what Vongole spaghetti is. Could you please explain your experience the first time you tasted it?

Enjoy your weekend !  Talk to you on Monday.

Teacher Edna <3

 

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