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제목 Company 등록일 2014-04-02
내용 I work for SamsungSDS which is the subsidiary company of Samsung group.
It is a big-sized company and was founded in 1985
and has been so far about 30 years
and there are about 15,000 employees.
It ranks top in the IT service in the Korean market.

We mainly support other Samsung subsidary company such as Samsung electronics.
As you know Samsung electronics has been making Galaxy phone and digitalTV.
My job is SW engineer for digitalTV in there.

My workplace is the R&D center of samsung electronics in Suwon City.
The place is very large and it is only for samsung company.
There are three tall buildings of R&D center.
In July, 2 twin buildings were established.
This area has many parks, restaurants, sport center, soccer fields
and many people take a walk after lunch.

I get to the office at around 9 a.m.
As soon as I sit on my chair, usually check the urgent e-mails.
After that take a coffee break.
I'm a general manager and manage 60 employees under me.

If you come to my office, the first thing you will notice is the digital-TV
and there are computer, fax machine, printer, projector, stationery
and DTV as developing sample.

I really satisfied with what I do and the people I work with.
담당강사 Nicole 등록일 2014-04-03
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I work for SamsungSDS which is the subsidiary company of Samsung group.
-> I work for SamsungSDS which is a subsidiary company of Samsung group.

It is a big-sized company and was founded in 1985

-> Correct sentence!

and has been so far about 30 years
-> and has been about 30 years so far

and there are about 15,000 employees.
-> Correct sentence!

It ranks top in the IT service in the Korean market.
-> Correct sentence!

We mainly support other Samsung subsidary company such as Samsung electronics.
-> We mainly support other Samsung subsidary companies such as Samsung Electronics.

As you know Samsung electronics has been making Galaxy phone and digitalTV.
-> As you know Samsung Electronics has been making Galaxy phones and digital TVs.

My job is SW engineer for digitalTV in there.
-> I am a software engineer for digital TVs in there.

My workplace is the R&D center of samsung electronics in Suwon City.
-> My workplace is located in the R&D Center of Samsung Electronics in Suwon City.

The place is very large and it is only for Samsung company.
-> Correct sentence!

There are three tall buildings of R&D center.
-> There are three tall R&D buildings.

In July, 2 twin buildings were established.
-> Correct sentence!
 
This area has many parks, restaurants, sport center, soccer fields
-> This area has many parks, restaurants, sport centers, soccer fields
 
and many people take a walk after lunch.
-> Correct sentence!

I get to the office at around 9 a.m.
-> I get to the office around 9 a.m.

As soon as I sit on my chair, usually check the urgent e-mails.
-> As soon as I sit on my chair, I usually check my urgent e-mails.
 
After that take a coffee break.
-> After that I take a coffee break.

I'm a general manager
-> Correct sentence!

and manage 60 employees under me.
-> and there are 60 employees under me.

If you come to my office, the first thing you will notice is the digital-TV
-> Correct sentence!

and there are computer, fax machine, printer, projector, stationery and DTV as developing sample.
-> and there is a computer, a fax machine, a printer, a projector, stationeries and DTV as developing samples.

 I really satisfied with what I do and the people I work with. 
-> I'm really satisfied with what I do and the people I work with. 

 

Hi there!

Thank you for introducing your company through this writing. You must be a lucky guy for working for such a nice and big company in Korea. Have a good night!

 

 

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