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제목 Go jogging 등록일 2014-04-15
내용 I can't jog often.
but I go jogging Whenever I have time.
I think I usually jog on holidays.
I like to jog.
and do other things like ~walking and listening to music.
But in my real life,actully,
I cannot do this often.
I think I can only go jogging once or twice a month.
it's not only my problem, I think most of korean men are the same.
when I need to talk about my hobbies,
like now on OPIc test, it is really hard to think one
because I usually don't have time.
My daily routine is home and office. That's it.
I often go to work on Saturday, so even on the weekends I'm busy.
So, I think many koreans don't have hobbies they do often.
담당강사 Angela 등록일 2014-04-15
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CORRECTION

I can't jog often but I go jogging Whenever I have time.
->I can't jog often but I go jogging whenever I have time.
(or you can also say "I can't jog often but I jog whenever I have time.")
(*Good!)

I think I usually jog on holidays.
->I think I usually jog on holidays.(Nice sentence)

I like to jog.
->I like to jog. (Good sentence!)

and do other things like ~walking and listening to music.
->(And I also like to do other things such as walking and listening to music while I'm jogging )

But in my real life, actully,I cannot do this often.
->(Or you can also say "But in real life,actually I cannot do this often "/"But in reality ,actually I can't do this often.)

I think I can only go jogging once or twice a month.
->I think I can only go jogging once or twice a month.(Good sentence!)

it's not only my problem, I think most of korean men are the same.
->It's not only my problem, I think most of the Korean men are the same.

when I need to talk about my hobbies,
->When I need to talk about my hobbies,(Good sentence!)

like now on OPIc test, it is really hard to think one
->like now in OPIc test, it is really hard to think of one (Good!)

because I usually don't have time.
->because I usually don't have time.(Nice!)


My daily routine is home and office.
->My daily routines are usually going to the office and back home. 

That's it.
->(And that's it!)

I often go to work on Saturday, so even on the weekends I'm busy.
->I often go to work on Saturday, so even on the weekends I'm busy.(Good sentence!)

(Or you can also say "I often go to work on Saturday, so even over the weekends I'm busy.

So, I think many  koreans don't have hobbies they do often.
->So, I think many Koreans don't have hobbies they do often.(Good sentence!)

 

COMMENT

Hello Neo!This is a good topic!You wrote it vey well.Jogging is a form of  activity. It builds strong bones and helps to maintain a healthy body.

It's good that you are trying to exercise even though you don't have much time.Keep it up!

Thank you for the wonderful information.

Enjoy your day!

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