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제목 | To Manage Children's Obesity | 등록일 | 2014-05-08 |
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내용 | Children's obesity is resulted from eating habit that enjoy ham, hot-dogs, hamburgers, etc. These fast foods are often exposed to the children whose parents are busy and difficult to take care of their everytime. Children tend to have fast foods in the school time or daytime. In that point, schools and teachers should instruct children to eat properly. In addition, school meals should include green foods and various nutrition. |
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담당강사 | Jasmine1 | 등록일 | 2014-05-09 |
첨삭 내용 | Children's obesity is resulted from eating habits (pl) that ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Eating habits that include ham, hotdogs... School is during the daytime so I don't know if you separated them because of weekends or what? Another solid piece of work! Good job on the possessives in this bit. |