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제목 Concerts 등록일 2014-05-11
내용 Well, I suppose I'd have to say that I really into going to concerts, particularly hard rock concerts, because that's my most favorite genre of music as a matter of fact. Well, I have several peers who are also great fans of that kind of music, so I prefer accompanying with them when I go to concerts. I can really enjoy the concerts with them, shouting, screaming and singing along. However, as my daughter is also a huge fan of that music, sometimes I bring her to the venues. Well, if I could, I would like to choose the closest seat to the singer. I believe that's because I could watch they playing in more detail, and also make a kind of interaction with them and I think that approach would enhance my feeling from the concert. But, you need to know that those seats are sometime way too expensive and sold out so rapidly that I usually have not been able to get it, though.
담당강사 Ida 등록일 2014-05-12
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Well, I suppose I'd have to say that I really into going to concerts, particularly hard rock concerts, because that's my most favorite genre of music as a matter of fact. Well, I have several peers who are also great fans of that kind of music, so I prefer accompanying with them when I go to concerts. I can really enjoy the concerts with them, shouting, screaming and singing along. However, as my daughter is also a huge fan of that music, sometimes I bring her to the venues. Well, if I could, I would like to choose the closest seat to the singer. I believe that's because I could watch they them playing play in more detail, and also make a kind of interaction with them and I think that approach would enhance my feeling from the concert. But, you need to know that those seats are sometime way too expensive and sold out so rapidly that I usually have not been able to get it, though.

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Good job! I also enjoy watching concerts, especially my favorite band. You were able to express your ideas substantially, though very minimal errors were noted. Just go over with it! I will talk to you in a few minutes. Have a great day!

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