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제목 | Spending vacation time at home! | 등록일 | 2014-05-13 |
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내용 | I'll make a script based on I 'm getting married! Pleas consider about this. 1. I spend my vacation at home with my wife and daughter. I like to catch up on sleep so taking a nap is something else I enjoy. Some of our favorite activities are playing board game, watching DVDs, or reading some books together. My wife is woderful cook and loves to make delicious food for us. My daughter and I enjoy eating her meals. Most of all, we enjoys spending together as a family. At that time my daghter was still very young. I have some special memories from that week, becasue it was an important time in my daughter's life. She was just beginning to speak and she said "Apa" for the first time, which is korean word for dad. Spending time at home with my familiy was far more special than taking an expensive oversea trip |
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담당강사 | JJ | 등록일 | 2014-05-14 |
첨삭 내용 | CORRECTION: 1. Pleas consider about this. > Please (spelling) consider this. 2. I spend my vacation at home with my wife and daughter. > I like spending my vacation at home with my wife and daughter. 3. I like to catch up on sleep so taking a nap is something else I enjoy. > I like to catch up with my sleep so taking a nap is something (eliminate "else") I enjoy. 4. Some of our favorite activities are playing board game, watching DVDs, or reading some books together. > Some of our favorite activities are playing board games (put "s"), watching DVDs, or reading some books together. 5. My wife is woderful cook and loves to make delicious food for us. > My wife is a (put article "a") woderful (you can also use "good") cook and loves to make delicious food for us. 6. Most of all, we enjoys spending together as a family. > Most of all, we enjoy (eliminate "s") spending time (put "time") together. (eliminate "as a family") 7. At that time my daghter was still very young. > At that time my daughter (spelling) was still very young. 8. I have some special memories from that week, becasue it was an important time in my daughter's life. > I cannot forget that week, because (spelling) it was an important event (use this word) in my daughter's life. 9. ...which is korean word for dad. > ....which is a (put article "a") korean word for dad. 10. Spending time at home with my familiy was far more special than taking an expensive oversea trip > Spending time at home with my familiy is (use "is") far more special than taking an expensive overseas (spelling) trip. (don't forget your period)
Hi Jeong, Wow, that was a very inspiring script! Though you are still single, you were able to tell what kind of life you would like to have when you get married and have your own family. Though your sentences need to be polished, I am still happy that you always try your best. Just always study the corrections and be careful with the right order of words next time. Thank you!
Teacher Jj |