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제목 | The Advantage and Disadvantage of the Middle Asian Democratization | 등록일 | 2014-05-22 |
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내용 | Nowdays, Middle Asian countries changed their own leaders. In the process, USA intervened and contributed to the democratization of them. These area was famous for frequent wars in the past, but is recovering the peace nowdays. It is related to the democratization of these area. Middle Asia supplies more than 50% of the oil globally, and the peace of these area result to the stable price of the oil. Finally, it leads to the positive condition of global economy. However, new governments of these countries were made in the support of the USA, so it is expected to be influenced by USA capital as a result. USA will obtain oil in the low price and USA companies will expand its biz-territories to these area. In case of Saudi Arabia, most people lost their language and use English for their common word. That is, this country is actually governed by American capitals and systems. |
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담당강사 | Jasmine1 | 등록일 | 2014-05-23 |
첨삭 내용 | Nowdays, Middle Asian countries change ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ These is for plurals USA typically isn't used as an adj, We would use "American", although I didn't mark this in your writing. Good job! I think you wrote a really solid, factual piece of work due to your work I assume. Have a fun weekend, James! |