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제목 I don't know that the book is in this class. 등록일 2014-06-10
내용 Thank you. I read your message.

I don't know that the book is in this class.
I just knew that yesterday.
I guessed you teach English in Korea.
As far as I know, Manila you living in is Philippines's capital.
I want to go there. and I hope you play basketball with me. Just kidding. ^^;;
I like basketball too. Basketball than other sports I like to exercise.
I remember that when I was a middle & high school student, I played Basketball almost everyday.
And I like SlamDunk cartoon. Do you know that? That is very famous in Korea & Japan.
Is it in your country? If you don't read it, I hope you to read it.
And I respect Michael Jordon. His play is miracle.
I don't visit to Manila yet. but I hope to visit there.
What is famous tourist in Manila?
Have been you visiting Seoul before? If you do that, I gladly tour for you.
Only I will very hard study English, to talk to you.^^;;
I appreciate you to understand my situation.
Thank you. see you later.
담당강사 Aileen 등록일 2014-06-11
첨삭 내용

Thank you. I read your message. I don't know that the book is in this class. I just knew that yesterday. I guessed you teach English in Korea. As far as I know, Manila you living in is Philippines's capital. I want to go there. and I hope you play basketball with me. Just kidding. ^^;; I like basketball too. Basketball than other sports I like to exercise. I remember that when I was a middle & high school student, I played Basketball almost everyday. And I like SlamDunk cartoon. Do you know that? That is very famous in Korea & Japan. Is it in your country? If you don't read it, I hope you to read it. And I respect Michael Jordon. His play is miracle. I don't visit to Manila yet. but I hope to visit there. What is famous tourist in Manila? Have been you visiting Seoul before? If you do that, I gladly tour for you. Only I will very hard study English, to talk to you.^^;; I appreciate you to understand my situation. Thank you. see you later.

Thank you. I read your message. I don't know that the book is in this class. I just knew that yesterday. I guessed you teach English in Korea. As far as I know, Manila you living in is Philippines's capital. I want to go there. and I hope you play basketball with me. Just kidding. ^^;; I like basketball too. Basketball than other sports I like to exercise. I remember that when I was a middle & high school student, I played Basketball almost everyday. And I like SlamDunk cartoon. Do you know that? That is very famous in Korea & Japan. Is it in your country? If you don't read it, I hope you to read it. And I respect Michael Jordon. His play is miracle. I don't visit to Manila yet. but I hope to visit there. What is famous tourist in Manila? Have been you visiting Seoul before? If you do that, I gladly tour for you. Only I will very hard study English, to talk to you.^^;; I appreciate you to understand my situation. Thank you. see you later.

 

CORRECTIONS:


I don't know that the book is in this class.

-> I don't know the book is in this class.

As far as I know, Manila you living in is Philippines's capital.

-> As far as I know, you live in Manila, the Philippines' capital.

I want to go there. and I hope you play basketball with me.

-> I want to go there and I hope you will play basketball with me.

Basketball than other sports I like to exercise.

-> I like basketball more than other sports, I like it for my exercise.

I remember that when I was a middle & high school student, I played Basketball almost everyday.

-> I remember that when I was a student, I played basketball almost everyday.

And I like SlamDunk cartoon. Do you know that?

-> I like SlamDunk cartoon, do you know that?

Is it in your country?

-> How about in your country?

If you don't read it, I hope you to read it.

-> If you haven't read it yet, I hope you will read it.

And I respect Michael Jordon.

-> And I respect Michael Jordan.

His play is miracle.

-> He played like a miracle.

I don't visit to Manila yet. but I hope to visit there.

-> I haven't been to Manila yet, but I hope to go there.

What is famous tourist in Manila?

-> What are the famous tourist spots in Manila?

Have been you visiting Seoul before?

-> Have you been here in Seoul?

If you do that, I gladly tour for you.

-> If you will go here, I will gladly tour you.

Only I will very hard study English, to talk to you.^^

-> However, I will study English so, I can talk to you well.^^

I appreciate you to understand my situation.

-> I appreciate you for understanding my situation.

see you later.

-> See you later.

 

COMMENT:

Hi Yeol!

Thank you for writing a message again. I can say that you are practicing your writing skills, and that's good! Take this as an opportunity to improve your English skills.

I haven't been to Korea, it's very expensive to go there but I want to. I knew SlamDunk. I watched that many times, I like team Shohoku! :)

I hope you will review the corrections I made. Have a good day! :)

~T. Aileen

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