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제목 Self Introduction~ 등록일 2014-06-16
내용 My name is Cho jung sang and I'm forty one(41) years old.
I am working at Information & Communication Technology related company and I am in Management Division.
My job is to manage the payments and the compliance.
I have carried out 'payment'jobs for almost 10 years,
but Compliance is a new role.
As, this is a new role, i am very much excited

I enjoyed play TV game with my son and i'm interested in coin collection.
i have been to three countries, among them chian, the coin did not see.
Now that i think about it, i so was wondering why there are no coin.
담당강사 Ralyn 등록일 2014-06-27
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My name is Cho jung sang and I'm forty one(41) years old. I am working at Information & Communication Technology related company and I am in Management Division. My job is to manage the payments and the compliance. I have carried out 'payment'jobs for almost 10 years, but Compliance is a new role. As, this is a new role, i am very much excited I enjoyed play TV game with my son and i'm interested in coin collection. i have been to three countries, among them chian, the coin did not see. Now that i think about it, i so was wondering why there are no coin.

 

-> I am working at Information & Communication Technology related company and I am in the Management Division.

->  My job is to manage the payments and the compliance. (You may use "the" if you would say, "My job is to manager the payments and compliance of our clients.)

->  As this is a new role, I am very much excited.

- >  I enjoy playing TV games with my son and I'm interested in coin collection.

->  I have been to three countries among them chian, the coin did not see (please clarify you idea). Suggestion: ...but I did not see any coins in China. 

- > Now that I think about it, I so was wondering why there were no coins.

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