Hi, Roby Good afternoon! Have you delicious runch?

-> Good Afternoon! Hi, Roby! Did you have a delicious lunch today?

I try an English comosition first ^^

->I want to try to do a composition for the first time.

when I was in elementary school I was mostly in charge of cleaning my parent's shoes.

->I was in charge of polishing my parents' shoes when I was in elementary school.

and when I was in middle school I was in charge of washing the dishes and cleaning my room

->When I was already in middle school, my mother appointed me to wash the dishes and to clean my room.

After I was married I did almost houseworks. but Sometimes my husband help me washing the dishes, the laundry and cleaning the room.

-> I am already doing all the household chores because I am already a married person but sometimes, my husband helps me washing the dishes, washing the laundry and cleaning the rooms.

Nowadays I asked my frist daughter to clean her room but she is very young, she was 7years old so she can't well.

-> Nowadays, I've been asking my 7 years old daughter to clean her room but she is still very young so she can't do the work very well.

Hi Genie! I am happy to see your first composition. You did a great job! Just study my corrections. It will help you enhance your skills. Keep up the good work!

Have a great day!

Roby ;)