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제목 Do you like painting? 등록일 2014-01-16
내용 I like Painting.
Until I was high school student, My dream is artist.
But in Korea, Be an artist is very hard. Because of money.
So i abandon to my dream and choosed software engineering.
Fortunatelly, I had an aptitude at s/w engineering. So I got a job concerned it and work now.
Nowadays, I can't paint because of work, but i try to go to museum or exhibition and enjoy a beautiful painting.
담당강사 Philip 등록일 2014-01-16
첨삭 내용 I like to paint. When I was a high school student, I dreamed of being an artist. But in Korea, to be an artist is very hard. Money is one big factor. So I abandoned to my dream and choosed software engineering. Fortunately, I had an aptitude at s/w engineering. So I got a job concentrated on it and is working now. Nowadays, I can't paint because of work, but I try to go to museums or exhibits. I enjoy beautiful paintings. ====================================== Hello Elena, You have good ideas to present in your composition but you need to be careful of your capitalization and use of words. You need to take into consideration the whole structure of your composition and thus words need to be chosen carefully like conjunctions and verb tenses. Please take note on how the teacher reinforced sentences with word changes as well as style. I also have delusions of being an artist and I am also guilty at looking at paintings at museums. Indeed there is something in art that makes a person better. Thank you for the effort! :D Teacher Philip ===================================== A good painting to me has always been like a friend. It keeps me company, comforts and inspires. Hedy Lamarr

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