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제목 Mosquito 등록일 2014-07-03
내용 Hi Anne
This is my first article in this phone call class.

We were discussed about the mosquito in this morning class.
So, I searched mosquito on the internet to find interesting information.
I could find several funny story in the web.
Finally I found " Mawbima Mosquito Repellent Newspaper "
It is one of the advertisement way.
Mawbima is famous Newspaper company in Sri Lanka.
There are a lot of Mosquitoes and they cause serious problems such as communicable diseases.
Especially dengue is cause by mosquitoes contact.
Mawbima Newspaper company print newspaper with Mosquito repellent ink
So, the newspaper can protect from the attack of mosquitoes

As you know, I rarely use English in working time.
So, to get the chance to use English, I will make an article frequently on this web.
Thanks for your kind comments
담당강사 Anne 등록일 2014-07-03
첨삭 내용

Hi Anne This is my first article in this phone call class.

We were discussed about the mosquito in this morning class.  -> In our class this morning, we discussed about the mosquito.

So, I searched mosquito on the internet to find interesting information.

I could find several funny story in the web.

Finally I found " Mawbima Mosquito Repellent Newspaper " It is one of the advertisement way. -> Finally, I found "Mawbima Mosquito Repellant Newspaper". (Do not forget to use a period in every sentence that you make) I think it was one way of their Newspaper's advertisement also. 

Mawbima is famous Newspaper company in Sri Lanka. -> Mawbima is a famous newspaper company in Sri Lanka. (You should know when to use the CAPITAL LETTER in a NOUN, like for example "newspaper". It is only a COMMON NOUN, so you only have to use small letter "N". If it is a PROPER NOUN, use CAPITAL LETTER.)

Mawbima Newspaper company print newspaper with Mosquito repellent ink So, the newspaper can protect from the attack of mosquitoes -> Mawbima Newsapaper Company prints newspapers with mosquito repellant ink so that the it can be protected from the attack of mosquitoes as well as those peole who will have the newspaper with them.

There are a lot of Mosquitoes and they cause serious problems such as communicable diseases.

Especially dengue is cause by mosquitoes contact. -> Especially Dengue, because it is caused by mosquito bites or direct contact of a mosquito to a person's skin.

As you know, I rarely use English in working time. So, to get the chance to use English, I will make an article frequently on this web. Thanks for your kind comments -> As you know, I rarely use English when I'm working. So, to get the chance to use English, I will frequently make an article on this web. Thanks for your kind comments.

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Hi Daniel smiley,

Good day! It was nice that you've already started to write an English article to improve yourself. You were able to construct good sentences here, however there were some words and phrases that you need to rearrange so that the sentence composition will be better. You will notice also in my corrections that I interchange some sentences in different positions. I did that for you to know how to compose an article with the correct order of thoughts and ideas. Review also some small details of my corrections like the use of period and capital letters.

I can see a lot of potential from you Daniel. I appreciate your efforts in doing this things. Keep it up!

~Teacher Anne wink

 

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