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제목 My job 등록일 2014-07-07
내용 I am working as a manager of IT company now.
I joined(entered) the samsung SDS in 1992. And i have worked for 22 years.
After joining, i worked for accounting programing for 8 years,
and then i worked at personnel department for six years and a half.
After that, i came back a field department again
and i have been working as a head of the department for 8 years.
My main role is to manage and evaluate my employees.
This work is hard but i am satisfied to my job because i can show my ability best.
Especially i like feeling of being young,
because my department is composed of young employees mostly
and i am working with them.
I love my company that take responsibility of my family's happiness.
And i feel the thanks for the thing that i can work.
담당강사 Riz 등록일 2014-07-07
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I am working as a manager of IT company now. - Good sentence

I joined(entered) the was employed in samsung SDS in 1992. And i have worked there for 22 years. After joining the company, i worked for as an accounting programing for 8 years and then i worked at in a personnel department for six years and a half.

After that, i came back to the a field department again and i have been working as a head of the department for 8 years.

My main role is to manage and evaluate my employees.- Good sentence

This work is hard but i am satisfied to my job because i can show my best ability. - good

Especially,  i like  the  feeling of being young, because majority  in my  department  are young employees mostly and i am working with them.

I love my company that take responsibility because it secures my family neeeds and  happiness.

And i feel the thanks greatful for the thing that i can work do.

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