" 'Ramyeon' is very common noodle in Korea. Everybody can cook it easily. But there is a special recipe only I have. Let me introduce the way to you. Boil two pots with water. After water boiling, put a Ramyeon' noodle into one put until it will be well-done. And put the Ramyeon's soup and some vegetables, egg, especially Kimchi into another pot. And take out nuddle frome first pot and move it to sencond pot. It make the Ramyeon less greasy. At last, put a cheese on the Ramyeon. "

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'Ramyeon' is very common noodle in Korea. Everybody can cook it easily. But there is a special recipe only I have. Let me introduce the way to you. Boil two pots with water. After water boiling, put a Ramyeon' noodle into one put until it will be well-done. And put the Ramyeon's soup and some vegetables, egg, especially Kimchi into another pot. And take out nuddle frome first pot and move it to sencond pot. It make the Ramyeon less greasy. At last, put a cheese on the Ramyeon.

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Ramyeon noodles is very common in Korea. Everybody can cook it easily, but there is a special recipe only I, have. Let me tell how it's done. First, you have to boil water into 2 different pots. When the water boils, put the Ramyeon noddle in one of those pots until cooked. After that, put the Ramyeon's sauce, some vegetables, egg and kimchi in the other pot then take the noodles out of the first pot and transfer it to the other. It makes the Ramyeon less greasy. Finally, put cheese on the top of Ramyeon.

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Dear Mr. Won,

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Love,
Teacher Angel

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