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제목 My hause 등록일 2014-07-14
내용 I live in apartment with my family. It is the first my own house.
I bought it ten years ago. My home has three rooms and a main veranda where I raise flower.
The veranda looks like flower garden. Two rooms were small but i extended their veranda.
So Two rooms became big. Even though my house is ten years old,
it is very clean because my wife clean up a house everyday.
I have a bed and a wardrobe in my room. The wardrobe in my room were built into the walls.
And i have a old TV in my room.
Recently, I bought a new apartment, so i have to sell the old apartment.
I usually relax at home watching TV and growing flowers for refreshing after work.
My house is heaven.
담당강사 Riz 등록일 2014-07-14
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I live in apartment with my family. - good

It is the first my own house house I owned

I bought it ten years ago. - good

My home has three rooms and a main veranda where I raise flower. -good

The veranda looks like  flower garden. - good

Two rooms were small but i extended their it to the veranda.

So Two rooms became big.- good

Even though my house is ten years old, it is very clean because my wife clean up a the house everyday.

I have a bed and a wardrobe in my room. good

The wardrobe in my room were was  built into the walls.

And i have a an old TV in my room.

Recently, I bought a new apartment, so i have to sell the old apartment.-good

I usually relax at home watching TV and growing flowers for refreshing after work. - good

My house is heaven.- good

 

Hi Kingkong,

Good job, you're composition is great. You're able to express every  details of your  house.

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