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제목 | My hause | 등록일 | 2014-07-14 |
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내용 | I live in apartment with my family. It is the first my own house. I bought it ten years ago. My home has three rooms and a main veranda where I raise flower. The veranda looks like flower garden. Two rooms were small but i extended their veranda. So Two rooms became big. Even though my house is ten years old, it is very clean because my wife clean up a house everyday. I have a bed and a wardrobe in my room. The wardrobe in my room were built into the walls. And i have a old TV in my room. Recently, I bought a new apartment, so i have to sell the old apartment. I usually relax at home watching TV and growing flowers for refreshing after work. My house is heaven. |
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담당강사 | Riz | 등록일 | 2014-07-14 |
첨삭 내용 | I live in apartment with my family. - good It is the first I bought it ten years ago. - good My home has three rooms and a main veranda where I raise flower. -good The veranda looks like flower garden. - good Two rooms were small but i extended So Two rooms became big.- good Even though my house is ten years old, it is very clean because my wife clean up I have a bed and a wardrobe in my room. good The wardrobe in my room And i have Recently, I bought a new apartment, so i have to sell the old apartment.-good I usually relax at home watching TV and growing flowers for refreshing after work. - good My house is heaven.- good
Hi Kingkong, Good job, you're composition is great. You're able to express every details of your house. |