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제목 | Camping | 등록일 | 2014-07-17 |
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내용 | I haven’t gone camping since I graduated elementary school. I was in boy scout when I was in elementary school. I went to camp as a member of boy scout. At that time I always wanted to go adventure. So I expected how the camp would be interesting. We went camping to the mountains with a nearby beach. It was fall. The weather was good for camping. It was not too cold and too hot. Every team needed a tent. I didn’t need to prepare for a tent, because one of my team members had it. The tent was perfect for 5 people. It was not too hard to set up. Instead of preparing for a tent, I brought my portable gas rand and food such as ramen, meat and Kimchi. It was very interesting to cook when we were in camp but I brought simple foods for comfortable. Camping was a good way to connect back to nature and spend a night out together without using too much money. It was a great, short vacation for us. If I have a chance to go camp with my family, I will do it in the future. | ||
담당강사 | Cindy | 등록일 | 2014-07-22 |
첨삭 내용 | I haven’t gone camping since I graduated elementary school. à I haven’t gone camping since I graduated elementary.
I was in boy scout when I was in elementary school. à I was in boy scout when I was in elementary.
I went to camp as a member of boy scout. à I went to a camp as a member of boy scout.
At that time I always wanted to go adventure. à At that time I always wanted to try adventures.
So I expected how the camp would be interesting. à So I was expecting how interesting the camp was.
We went camping to the mountains with a nearby beach. à We went camping to the mountains in the nearby beach.
It was fall. The weather was good for camping. It was not too cold and too hot. Every team needed a tent. I didn’t need to prepare for a tent, because one of my team members had it. The tent was perfect for 5 people. It was not too hard to set up.
Instead of preparing for a tent, I brought my portable gas rand and food such as ramen, meat and Kimchi. à Instead of preparing for a tent, I brought my portable gas range and food such as ramen, meat and Kimchi.
It was very interesting to cook when we were in camp but I brought simple foods for comfortable. à It was very interesting to cook when we were in the camp, but I brought simple foods for convenience.
Camping was a good way to connect back to nature and spend a night out together without using too much money. It was a great, short vacation for us.
If I have a chance to go camping with my family, I will do it in the future. à If I have a chance to go camping with my family, I will do it in the future.
Hello Jake! Good morning! Thank you so much for this. I enjoyed reading this. I think that's really especiall if you're with your family and friends. I really hope that you would be able to go camping with your loved ones in the future. I don't have a chance to go camping as well, but I really like to try it again. Anyway, please study the corrections that I made. Have a wonderful day! ^^
Cindy (^_^) |