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제목 Camping 등록일 2014-07-17
내용 I haven’t gone camping since I graduated elementary school. I was in boy scout when I was in elementary school. I went to camp as a member of boy scout. At that time I always wanted to go adventure. So I expected how the camp would be interesting. We went camping to the mountains with a nearby beach. It was fall. The weather was good for camping. It was not too cold and too hot. Every team needed a tent. I didn’t need to prepare for a tent, because one of my team members had it. The tent was perfect for 5 people. It was not too hard to set up. Instead of preparing for a tent, I brought my portable gas rand and food such as ramen, meat and Kimchi. It was very interesting to cook when we were in camp but I brought simple foods for comfortable. Camping was a good way to connect back to nature and spend a night out together without using too much money. It was a great, short vacation for us. If I have a chance to go camp with my family, I will do it in the future.
담당강사 Cindy 등록일 2014-07-22
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I haven’t gone camping since I graduated elementary school.

à I haven’t gone camping since I graduated elementary.

 

I was in boy scout when I was in elementary school.

à I was in boy scout when I was in elementary.

 

I went to camp as a member of boy scout.

à I went to a camp as a member of boy scout.

 

At that time I always wanted to go adventure.

à At that time I always wanted to try adventures.

 

So I expected how the camp would be interesting.

à So I was expecting how interesting the camp was.

 

We went camping to the mountains with a nearby beach.

à We went camping to the mountains in the nearby beach.

 

It was fall. The weather was good for camping. It was not too cold and too hot. Every team needed a tent. I didn’t need to prepare for a tent, because one of my team members had it. The tent was perfect for 5 people. It was not too hard to set up.

 

Instead of preparing for a tent, I brought my portable gas rand and food such as ramen, meat and Kimchi.

à Instead of preparing for a tent, I brought my portable gas range and food such as ramen, meat and Kimchi.

 

 It was very interesting to cook when we were in camp but I brought simple foods for comfortable.

à It was very interesting to cook when we were in the camp, but I brought simple foods for convenience.

 

Camping was a good way to connect back to nature and spend a night out together without using too much money. It was a great, short vacation for us.

 

If I have a chance to go camping with my family, I will do it in the future.

à If I have a chance to go camping with my family, I will do it in the future.

 

Hello Jake! Good morning! Thank you so much for this. I enjoyed reading this. I think that's really especiall if you're with your family and friends. I really hope that you would be able to go camping with your loved ones in the future. I don't have a chance to go camping as well, but I really like to try it again. Anyway, please study the corrections that I made. Have a wonderful day! ^^

 

Cindy (^_^)

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