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| 제목 | Please, check this question and answer | 등록일 | 2014-07-17 |
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| 내용 | Good morning ! Teacher Bree. Nowadays I try to get high score on the opic test, so i want you to check this answer. here is question. and next is my answer about question. Compare the activities which children usually do at the park as opposed to those which adults do while at the park. Whenever I go to the park, I can see two kinds of group. one group is family. they are composed of some adults and some kids. May be adults are parents. seeing them, adult usually watch their children. because they are care about their children. on the other hands, children run around and play with their friends. second group is a person coming alone. usually this group is composed of adult. they come to the park for health. they are walking or running or riding a bicycle around the park. |
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| 담당강사 | Bree | 등록일 | 2014-07-17 |
| 첨삭 내용 | Good morning, teachere Bree! Nowadays I try to get a higher score in OPIC Test that's why I'd like you to check my answer. Here is the question and my answer: Compare the activities which children usually do at the park as opposed to those which adults do while at the park. (Is this the exact composition of the question?) Whenever I go to the park I can see two kinds of group. The first group is family. It's a combination of adults and children. The adults might be the parents. Watching them, adults usually look after their children because they care about them. On the other hand, children freely play around with their friends at the park. The second group is composed of people going to the park by themselves. This group is usually composed of adults. They go to the park to exercise to stay fit. They walk, run or ride the bike around the park. ---much better? I know you can make it more perfect next time. Have a nice day! |
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